She’s all that by Cutterpillow [Review]

Author: Cutterpillow
Story Title: She’s all that
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/SAT
Reviewer: Danhobak

Title: 3/5
The title isn’t very original and doesn’t pertain to the story at all.

Poster & Background: 9/10
The poster/background is pretty. Love the color

Characters: 3/5
The characters weren’t very well developed. Especially the minor characters

Forewords: 7/10
I like how the forward included a brief summary

Plot: 14/20
This plot is VERY overused and there really was no effort to make it more special than others. It was a typical, popular boy having an inner debate whether to choose his friends or follow his heart.

Flow: 7/10
The flow was really choppy, but considering that English isn’t your native language, it’s understandable

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/20
The language you use, isn’t something you’d want to use while writing a story. That style is more for talking, not for writing a plot. Also there were quite a few grammatical errors, but seeing as English is your second language, you did pretty well.

Style of writing: 11/15
It’s really simple and easy to read

Overall enjoyment: 4/5
It was a cute story!

Total: 68/100

I thought your story was cute overall, but in order to improve your writing, I suggest that you read a lot. Reading helps improve your grammar, especially if you’re not too confident with English. Good luck on your other stories!